Well, the words were fine, but none of us know how you said them. we're you gasping for breath between words? was your body shaking? did you snort at all? was there a booger on your face?
k', i'm just gonna give you some advice since you seem to be having a lot of trouble with the ladies. There is no set formula or plan or strategy to talk to the womyn. Now, it's supposed to be a completely natural thing, considering they are just human beings after all. Don't try to force it. That's what it sounds like to me that you're doing here. Let it come naturaly. She may have gotten creeped out by you, especialy if you keep on pressing advances. Women, and people in general, are also a lot more open to having a conversation with attractive people. It's the sad truth that this world is designed for good looking people. Life will be much easier for you if you're on hollywood's top ten hot people. If you don't think of yourself as too attractive, consider working out, getting a new wardrobe, ect. course, attractiveness isn;t the only thing that will get you a date, but it certainly does help.
... yeah, i know my advice sucks, but this is what works for me.