karatekid121005

Whatup KarateKid!
What are you doing this summer?

Argh, haven't been on for ages, just saw your last message - I'm so sorry man! You going ok?

Whoops, sorry mate, been off the net for a while. Haven't been up to too much, started uni which is sucking up all my time. so fun tho! Wbu?

hey, thats fan-freaking-tastic! serious dream come true you luck dog

sorry for the delay man, been overseas not much is up on my end, how you going?

im bored as hell lol

hows school?

n/m man same ole crap.

whatup Kiddo!

Hey Karatekid! Hows it going?

=)
Whatup Karate champ!

ok awesome
do you chat in the ADISC chatroom here?

- Will =)

Whatup!
I am a friend of Gingy's (we are both from NY), currently living in FL now.
I just wanted to say HEY!
....I seen you in The FL group!
~ Will =)

Thanks for adding me ^w^

Thanks for the add i guess

The thread was locked, so unless you revive the story (which I doubt you'd want to do) then you're not going to really do much with it. The first thing that distinguishes a great writer from a good writer is the material they read and have read! Try reading the classics... there are a lot of them out there! Cody and the Baby Start Over Program, Thirteen Days, The Aden Series, The Story of David Mayter, ETC ETC. In terms of grammar, though, as these stories show off a good plot best, it'd be wise to look online. Another good way of getting a feel of things is looking at the popular stories of the current day. I.E my own work Jesse's Book, for example.

Hey, when responding, respond on my profile please. That's the only way I see it.

And yes, people will assume. But, I assumed the same as them. Now, if we were wrong, oh well. BUT... you still failed in something. You failed in keeping the reader intrigued and entertained from the start. You'll need to work on this the most, trust me on that. Introduction is key.

It pisses me off that people assume what the story is going to be.

Have you ever heard the assumeing makes an ass out you and me? (ass u me)