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Old 11-12-2008   #1 (permalink)
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Default The St Patrick's Day Diaper

It is Friday March 14 2003 A teenage boy was going down the stares into a unfinished basement to get ready for bed and along the way his sister Jane said: "Hey Jimmy! You know what tomorrow is right?" and Jimmy replied: "Why yes I sure do. It is not only Saturday but it is also St Patrick's Day!" And Jane replied: "And you know what that means?" Jimmy taken a big gulp and replied in a tone of terror: "You will be giving me those awful painful pinches in the morning." And Jane said in a very bubbly voice of pure joy: "YES! AND IT IS GONG TO BE ALLOT OF FUN DOING SUCH! Sweet dreams to you boy who only wears diapers to bed." And she grinned devilishly.

Jimmy had stayed up the night and waited till he heard the snoring that Jane usually emits when she is is sleeping. IT was not long until he has heard the snore when he has dashed for the crayon, pen, and pencil box and he has broken out a couple of crayons that were a shade of green and on to his diaper he started drawing. He has drew and drawn and made a nice picture that had four clover leaves on it with a dark border outline and a light green insides and he has taken a different shade of green and written: "Happy St Patrick's Day!" and he sighed with relief and said to him self as if he was talking to Jane: "I would love to see you pinch me now sunshine!" and put the crayons away and turned out the light and gone and snuggled down into his covers and off to sleep he has gone.

It was the next day March 15, 2003: 9:00 AM when Jimmy has awakened to the cold that he has expected with Jane shouting at the top of her lungs: "YOU! HOW COULD YOU OUT SMART YOUR BIG SISTER?!?! YOU ARE SUPPOSED TO BE THE DUMBER ONE IN FEAR AND THIS?!?! CURSE YOU!!!!" And Jane gone storming away stomping her feet and cursing her head off. Jimmy lay-ed there in bed with out any covers on him and he started to snicker his head off and said to him self: "Success. I have done it. I have escaped the evil pinching of her." And he has got up out of bed and thrown on a white shirt and still in his now wet but decorated diaper has gone up to get some breakfast and when his other sister Samantha got the news of Jane getting outsmarted by Jimmy she just had to go and see it for her self so she found jimmy in the kitchen sat down to a bowl of cereal and seen that he was still wearing the wet diaper and asked him if she can see it and he shown her and she said in a laughing but congratulating voice: "Good Job Jimmy! That is just very brilliant."

It was soon after Jimmy finished his breakfast when his brother Malcolm seen the diaper and the picture on it and he had laughed his head off and congratulated his big brother Jimmy for out smarting Jane which Samantha helped Malcolm perform the outsmarting by giving him a green shirt to wear to bed while Samantha had gone to bed with green pajama pants on. Not soon after Malcolm's congratulation's to Jimmy when his parents Ken and Judy came out after Jane gone crying to them about her siblings being such mean people to her and ruining her fun and Ken glanced at Jimmy and his diaper and said: "It is not good to be sitting or standing in your urine for as long as you are and you are going to need a shower." And Judy added: "Nice drawing's but next time please do that on paper and not on your diapers." Jimmy said: "Well I just did not want to be waking up to the painful pinching from that daemon Jane who loves to torment her siblings." Judy replied: "Don't you be saying that about your sister. I don't like that and I don't want any more of that out of you at all. IS that clear?" And Jimmy replied: "Yes" And Judy said: "Well you need to do what your father told you to do and go and take a shower and here is a green shirt for you to wear."
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THIS NEEDS a lot of work!!! but keep it up anyways

Oh and also A. the story moves too fast and B. a lot of it doesn't really make sense

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I recommend that you read some story writing guides. Then, think of what you would do in whatever kind of situation you were going for.
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