BabyStar [Mature Content]

[1magus]

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[Slang]

Read this story over the past couple days... it freakin gnarly. Just... yeah... too many good things to say. Reading it all at once I can see that you haven't rushed anything; it's slow, methodical and all planned out by the looks of things. 23 chapters in you're only making it more interesting, which is impressive, and the reader has been given a reason to care about every character (whether you care for them or not is a different subject). Sklyar is the total embodiment of innoncence and good, having done nothing that hasn't been clearly justifiable in the story so far. Ms. Rosen is bad, yeah, but she's more complex, they was she can flip from total maniac to caring mother type in no time. Her comments about Skylar "being so much like him" adds a lot to her too. Turning Kyle from trust fed to total jackass was an unexpected but clever move, and Trent's just hardcore. I think it's pretty sweet that end every chapter with a cliff hanger, but the fact that they don't seem like twists for the sake of twists, and that they actually add to the story is great. I like how you contrast the ideal dream life of many TB/DL types being in diapers with the painful, torturous experience Skyler is in too. Another cool thing is that as unrealistic as some of the story may seem, I totally got into it (as many others did as well, obviously). So yeah, sweet work man, and now I guess I'm amongst those who have to patiently wait for the next installment to come out.

[satyrical]

Originally Posted by Slang

Read this story over the past couple days... it freakin gnarly. Just... yeah... too many good things to say. Reading it all at once I can see that you haven't rushed anything; it's slow, methodical and all planned out by the looks of things. 23 chapters in you're only making it more interesting, which is impressive, and the reader has been given a reason to care about every character (whether you care for them or not is a different subject). Sklyar is the total embodiment of innoncence and good, having done nothing that hasn't been clearly justifiable in the story so far. Ms. Rosen is bad, yeah, but she's more complex, they was she can flip from total maniac to caring mother type in no time. Her comments about Skylar "being so much like him" adds a lot to her too. Turning Kyle from trust fed to total jackass was an unexpected but clever move, and Trent's just hardcore. I think it's pretty sweet that end every chapter with a cliff hanger, but the fact that they don't seem like twists for the sake of twists, and that they actually add to the story is great. I like how you contrast the ideal dream life of many TB/DL types being in diapers with the painful, torturous experience Skyler is in too. Another cool thing is that as unrealistic as some of the story may seem, I totally got into it (as many others did as well, obviously). So yeah, sweet work man, and now I guess I'm amongst those who have to patiently wait for the next installment to come out.

Thank you! That's the kind of comment I love to get- while I like getting all comments, the ones that are actually constructive are by far my favourite, and help me gain inspiration and motivation.

But I'm glad everyone's enjoyed the story. However, I just realized, I forgot two key words at the end of the last chapter: "The End" I'm really sorry for making you think there was more to it, but that was the final chapter. Skylar's been taken in by someone, and Elle managed to set off the detonator, with Trent right by her side. Like a good novel, it's left open for the reader to imagine what happens next.

So thanks to everyone for all your comments and encouragement. It's been a great 23 chapters and I really enjoyed writing it, and I hope you enjoyed reading it just as much. I'll be taking a break from writing for a while and oh I'm just kidding, that wasn't the last chapter. There will be a new one coming in a few weeks- early December or so. In fact, I'll churn out a few chapters then. Right now I'm far too busy.

[Slang]

Reading that I was actually contemplating stabbing you in the throat with a screw driver. I was all like "no way he's stopping after I just got into it", but yeah, guess I should seen the fake coming. You've realized your writing captivates people and now you're just messing with our heads. Cruel man, totally brutally cruel.

Can't wait for the next part (not saying I physically can't, I'm sure I can handle it, but I'm excited, ya know?), and glad you dig my long winded analysis / critique of the story.

[gnd567]

I thought you really serious for a minute there! I was like "But it can't be over, it just CAN'T be over yet!!" Can't wait to read more.

[baconbit]

I was about to chew you out saty.

[Grapejuice]

Originally Posted by baconbit

I was about to chew you out saty.

That sounds SO wrong. :P

But yeah i actually fell for the fake <_>

[Laram]

Originally Posted by baconbit

I was about to chew you out saty.

Well, I Was Ready To Stomp His Guts Out... xD

[NinjaRider]

You should have just said that was the end and come December low and behold new chapters come out. Mean? Yes but but surprising

[Jakethefox]

:O

dont fuck with me like that Satyrical D:
I would have had to skin someone alive for that D:<