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Originally Posted by Dr_J
I had actually ended Chapter 23 with the news of John's father dying. I deliberately wrote it at the end of that chapter to add to that "shock" factor someone gets when they initially find out that someone close to them has died. It was in a sense a twist, because nobody expected it. The last paragraph of Chapter 23 is as follows:
"Two days later, even after all that had happened, I received a phone call from my mother. My father died of a heart attack. Just like that, he was dead. Gone forever, leaving the remnants of our war lingering over my soul for an indefinite amount of time. That’s when I got a first-hand experience of what insanity felt like."
I feel like I did add the "oh-my-gosh-what-a-twist!" element by placing it smack dab at the end.
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My mistake, I missed that last part. That said, why not play out the phone call, instead of just saying that he'd got the call?
15-10-2009
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