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Old 28-03-2008   #1 (permalink)
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This is a story I started writing a few months ago and I just started to work on it again I hope you guys like it and some credit goes to FullMetal for showing me how to edit it.


Chapter 1


“Hey, wait up big bro.” Yelled Ryan, running to catch up with his big brother, Kenshin. Kenshin stopped and looked over his shoulder to see his little brother running after him.

“Kenshin, you know I can’t walk as fast as you.” Said Ryan

“Sorry lil bro, come on get on my back I’ll give you a piggy back ride.” Ryan jumped at this because he loved it when his big brother would let him hang out with him and the piggy back ride was an added bonus.

Meet Kenshin and Ryan Hemorea; Kenshin’s a normal 16 year old boy, though he has some problems seeing and doing physical things because of his Optic nerve atrophy and hydrocephalus, two diseases he’s been stuck with since birth. Ryan, his 7 year old brother, always looked up to Kenshin because he was always teased and picked on. Now, everyone gets teased once in a while, but Ryan got it most because he was also born with birth defects. Ryan was born with a condition called tiny kid disease which gave him the appearance, strength, and stamina of a 2 year old, and as if that wasn’t enough Ryan was also born with no control over his bladder or bowls which caused him to wear diapers, so you can see why he gets teased really badly, but his brother and friends never ceased to defend him.

“Where are we going big brother?” Ryan asked at Kenshin ran down the street with his little brother on his back.

“Don’t you remember lil bro; we’re going to go hang out with Kadis for the day.”
Ryan let out a squeal of joy because it wasn’t everyday that he got to hang out with two of his favorite people.

Kadis was Kenshin’s girlfriend, a 15 year old African American girl with long black hair and a smile that could light up even the darkest room.It was extremely apparent that Kenshin was deeply in love with her. Ryan loved her too but not in the same sense as his big brother. Because of Ryan’s birth defect he was also an infantilist, he loved to be treated like a baby and act like one too. Ryan kind of saw Kadis as a second mommy, as he put it, since she would always play with him and treated him as if he were her own child. They arrived at Kadis’s house and Kenshin let Ryan off of his back, as they both ran to the door.

“Can I ring the bell Kenshin, please?” Ryan said standing next to him sucking his thumb cutely.

“Sure lil bro” Kenshin smiled and picked his brother up so he could reach the door bell. Ryan rang the bell and within a few seconds Kadis was at the door, ready with a big hug for both of them.

“Hey Kadis, what up?” Kenshin said wrapped her arms around him.

“I’m doing well” said Kadis as she finished hugging him and bent down to pick up Ryan, kissing him on the nose.

“Hi mommy!” said Ryan as she hugged and kissed him, setting him back down so he was standing next to Kenshin.

“Hi sweetie” she said as she saw Ryan blush.

“So how are my two favorite men?

“Good” said the two brothers at the same time.

“So what’s the plan for today guys?

“I wanna watch Blue’s Clues!” Ryan yelled out in an excited tone.

“Nee-chan, remember your manners.” Kenshin said patting his brother’s head.

“Sowwy” he said in a babyish ton of voice. “May I pwease watch Blues Clues?” Kadis and Kenshin stood there smiling.

“Yes you can my Baby-chan.” Kadis replied.

Ryan smiled as he ran up and hugged her leg, then ran inside to the living room and plopped himself on the couch in front the TV, turning it onto Blue’s Clues just as it was starting. Kenshin and Kadis followed him and sat on the couch watching the show. They sat there for an hour watching TV until Ryan tired himself out, ready for a nap. Kenshin picked his little brother up, ready to carry him to bed. Kenshin walked to Kadis’s room and took Ryan’s shoes off, tucking him into bed, and saying goodnight, leaving the door cracked so they could hear when he woke up.
He walked back to the living room and sat down on the couch. They started talking and cuddling, doing so for what seemed to be an hour when they heard Ryan crying and calling their names. Jumping up, they went to Kadis’s room to see what the matter was. They saw Ryan sitting straight up in the bed, sobbing. Kenshin and Kadis both walked over and sat on the bed with looks of concern on there faces. Kenshin picked his little brother up and sat him on his knee, trying to calm him down.

“What's wrong, big guy?” Kenshin asked as Ryan laid his head on his brother’s shoulder.

“Bad dream, big brother.” Ryan sobbed.

“It’s ok, now we’re here and everything’s okay.”

“There now that’s better.” Kenshin said with a smile as Ryan lifted his head and smiled as Kenshin dried his eyes.

Ryan smiled and cuddled between his big brother and Kadis. Then Kenshin and Kadis both made a similar face at the same time. Ryan had wet and messed his diaper. Kenshin and Kadis each exchanged looks like a mental chess game to see who was going to change him. Unfortunately for Kenshin he lost and took off the backpack he had on over his shoulder, carrying both the bag and Ryan to the bathroom. He cleared away some of Kadis’s makeup off the counter, laid Ryan down, and opened up his bag.

Pulling out the baby powder, wipes and a fresh diaper, he took Ryan’s jeans off, and lifted up his shirt. Ryan laughed as Kenshin playfully blew into his small belly. Kenshin then took off Ryan’s dirty diaper, cleaned him up, and taped a new diaper on the small boy. Ryan smiled up at his big brother, thanking him for the change. Kenshin then put Ryan’s cloths back on and cleaned up the bathroom, returning Ryan back to Kadis’ room, and placed him on the bed.

“Hey I got an idea guys, why don’t we all go to the mall for a little while and see if we can find anything good. We can even go to that candy store.” Kenshin said with an eager look on his face.

Kadis and Ryan jumped at this idea and it was settled. Within 10 minutes they were out of the house and walking toward the mall with Ryan on Kenshin’s back.

“Hey Kadis, wanna race? Looser buys lunch.” Kenshin said with a smile.

“You’re on!” She said with an eager look in her eye.

They started running, both evenly matched. As the mall was nearing though, Kenshin gained speed, and took the win.

“Man Ken-chan you never let me win!” Said Kadis, crossing her arms in protest.

“It’s ok Kadis I’ll buy lunch.” Kenshin said with a smile as he kissed her on the forehead, making Ryan giggle. They went to the food court and each got their favorites; Kenshin getting a big tuna sandwich from Subway, Kadis getting a big bowl of ramen, and Ryan getting a big slice of pepperoni pizza. As they ate, Kadis and Kenshin talked about school and all of the boneheads that they deal with on a daily basis, which fascinated and yet bored Ryan to death.

After about 15 minutes or so of talking, everyone was done eating, Kenshin took Ryan to the bathroom to change him and within 10 minutes they were walking around the mall, Ryan on Kenshin’s back as usual. Looking at all the shops, they headed into Gamestop and Kenshin bought Smack down vs. Raw 2008, a wrestling game that he had been waiting to come out for months. As they left the store they started talking.

“Man I can’t wait to get home and play this.” Kenshin said with a big grin on his face.

“So what do you guys want to do now?” asked Kenshin.

“Can we go to the toy store big brother? Pweas?.”

“That ok with you, Kadis?”

“Yeah sure, let’s go.” Kadis said with a smile, and Ryan perked up.

They walked into the toy store and Ryan went nuts running in every direction; which just made Kenshin and Kadis smiles and started giggling. Then Ryan ran up to them with a Spiderman action figure.

“Will you buy this for me big bro? Pwease?”

“Sure” Kenshin said with a smile, as he purchased the toy; causing Ryan to hug his big brothers legs tightly in gratitude.
"Leaving the toy store, they headed over to 'Sweets from Heaven,' a near by candy shop, where they stocked up ad headed for the arcade. Time quickly flew, and they were soon on their way home."

"As they approached Kadis' door, they said their goodbyes. Kadis kissed Kenshin, saying goodnight. She then knelt down, giving Ryan a kiss on his forehead, as he blushed in approval.

"See you tomorrow, guys!" She said as she entered her home.

And with that, Kenshin picked his little brother up and balanced him on his shoulders as they walked into the nigh.
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I didn;t reread it since i read the first few chapters you posted before. So all i can say is i want to see you post all the old chapters quick because if i remember right this is a good story.
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Thanks, I am going to wait a few days for the people that have never read it and then post the next chapter.
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This is good I can't wait to read more
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please post more a great story love it
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LOVE IT!!!

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Thanks for the support guys.

Chapter 2

Kenshin awoke the next morning and went about his usual morning retchual of getting dressed and putting his hair back in a pony tail, and then walked to his little brothers room. He went over to Ryan’s crib and let down the bar and slowly rubbed his back intil his eyes opened.

“Hey big brother.” Ryan said sleepishly rubing his eyes and giving his brother a big smile.

“Hey lil bro, did you sleep well?”

“I was intil you woke me up.” Ryan said siting up and crossing his arms.

“Aw, I’m sorry lil bro I’m just doing what I do every morning.”

“That’s alright Kenny.” Said Ryan standing up in his crib and giving his brother a big hug.

Kenshin smled and huged his brother.

“Now lets get you changed and ready for the day.” Said Kenshin picking him up and walking over to the changing table. Kenshin proceded to lift up his brothers shirt and blow into his stumic which made Ryan laugh and wet himself even more. Kenshin smiled to and proceded to change him.

“Now that that’s done what do you want to wear today?”
Ryan pointed to a Transformers shirt and jeans.

“As you wish.” Kenshin said with a smile and dressed his little brother.
“Now I don’t know about you but I’m starving.”

“yeah, I am too.”
Kenshin and Ryan ran down the stairs to the kitchen were they found a fully prepared breakfast and a note which read:

Dear Kenshin and Ryan,
Your dad and I have to work today and we won’t be home intil later tonight, Kenshin your in charge, Be good and be responcable.
Love you both.
mom

Kenshin read the note to himself and then aloud to Ryan.
“Well looks like we’re on are own for today.” Kenshin said with a smile.

“Then lets eat.” Ryan said giggling.

There ate there breakfast, talking about random things and within 15 minutes they were done. They put the dishes in the sink and went into the living room. Kenshin turned on the tv so Ryan could watch all his Saturday morning cartoons and then Kenshin got on his computer and started playing a game of Go inline with one of his friends. After all of his shows were over he walked over to to Kenshin on the computer.

“What are you doing big Kenny?” Ryan asked with a puzzling look on his face.

“I’m playing Go.” said Kenshin as he was trying to break an atari.

“What’s Go?” Ryan asked with a puzzling look.

“It’s a board game invented by the Chinese about 4,000 years ago. I found this anime called Hikaru no Go about a year ago and thought the game looked interesting, so I started searching online to is if I could find out more about the game. I found what I was looking for when I stumbed on this site and started talking to people. They told me the ins and outs of the game and I got hooked.”

“Wow.” Ryan said with a gleam in his eyes. “Can you teach me how to play?”

Kenshin nodded and Ryan jumped into his lap.

“Ok lets get started. First of all Go is played on a boared of a few different sizes, you have the 5 x 5, 6 x 6, 9 x 9, 13 x 13, and 19 x 19. Do you understand?”

Ryan noded so Kenshin went back to explaining.

“Go is played between two people using stones, one person using black the other using white.”

“Ok this doesn’t seem that hard.” Smiled Ryan

“The object of the game is to capture your enemy’s stones and have the most teritory at the end of the game.”

Ok, so how do I capture enemy stones?”

“You have to seround them on all sides and then the stone is considered dead and the stone is yours.”

Kenshin started typing on the computer telling his friend that he was teaching his little brother how to play and asked him if they could play a teaching game, his friend agreed and they started the game going slow so Kenshin could show Ryan what to do and Ryan started getting it after a while. After about 20 minutes in the teaching game Kenshin had beat his friend and said good game.

“So you’ve seen how the game is played and you have a disent understanding of what to do, do you want to give it a try?”

“Yeah.” Ryan said really excited.

“Ok then.” Kenshin said smiling and then told his friend that his little brother wanted to try out a game and asked if that was ok, he agreed and they started playing.
After a few minutes Ryan lost the game and started sobbing into Kenshin’s sholder.
“I don’t get it big bro, I did everything right why didn’t I win?

“It’s ok lil bro, it’s true you lost but it’s ok you did better then I thought you would and it’s kinda good that you lost because you can learn from your mistakes.”

“Ok Kenny, I’m going to keep practising and maybe one day I’ll be able to beat you.” Ryan said as he stopped sobbing and looked at his brother with a big grin in his face.

“Good, I look forward to it.” Kenshin said with a smile and pated his brother on the head. Then Kenshin logged off the computer and looked at Ryan.

“So what do you want to do now?” but just then something hit him thought all of the exsitment Ryan had wet himself, so Kehsnin picked him up and took him took him to his room and changed him. After that it was 12:00 and they were both getting hungery.

“Oh man I’m starving, lets get something to eat.” Said Kenshin holding his stumic.

“Yeah, I’m hungery too.” Kenshin picked Ryan up and took him to the kitchen, sat him down and started maked griled cheese sanshiches

“So after we eat what do you feel like doing?” Said Kenshin.

“I wanta go to the park!” Said Ryan acting really hyper.

“Ok settle down.” Said Kenshin he put a sandwhich in frount of him. “We’ll go to the park but first you got to eat so you hav energy to play.”

Ryan noded and started eating, Kenshin sat down and did the same. After a few minutes they were down and they went to Ryan’s room to get a diaper bag ready with everything they would need like diapers, wipes, a few toys and some juice boxes.

“Ok looks like were ready, so lets get going.” Said Kenshin putting the bag over his sholder.

They went down to the kitchen and Kenshin wrote a note for there parents just in case there parents got home before they did and left it on the kitchen table, then walked out locking the door behind them.
They went in the garage to get Ryan’s carseat from there mom’s car and put it in Kenshin’s car, a used 2001 black Mustang his parents had given him for a birthday present on his 16th birthday. Kenshin straped Ryan into his carseat which he didn’t really like because he knew he was a big boy and didn’t need one.
“I’m sorry lil bro, but mom and dads orders, I know you’re a big boy but because your so small you still need to be in a carseat when we take you anywhere it’s just cause we love you and we want you to be safe.”

Ryan still didn’t like it and had a frown on his face but that all changed with Kenshin turned on the car and put in a Black Sabbith CD and turned it up real loud, but soft enough so it wouldn’t hear Ryan’s ears. Kenshin looked at Ryan as he backed the car out of the driveway and Ryan had a big smile on his face.

They drove for about 10 minutes and then pulled into the parking lot of Ryan’s favorite park and his eyes lit up with joy and he started squarming in his carseat. Kenshin parked the car and took Ryan out of his carseat and walked him to the jungal gym and let him run free, while Kenshin watched him from a near by bench.

Ryan ran around for an hour or so playing with all of the other kids and making new friends, but then some kids that looked to be about 12 came over to him and started teasiing him.
Kenshin watched as this was going one knowing that he needed to step in and stop this, but he also knew that Ryan needed to learn to fight his own battle becausse Kenshin wasn’t always going to be there to protect him.
The kids didn’t stop with teasing they started to beat him up and that was the last straw. Kenshin ran over and pulled the boys off of Ryan, through them to the ground and looked to see if Ryan was ok. He didn’t look to bad the only visable make was that his right cheek was a little swolen. Kenshin then walked over to the two boys.

“What the hell do you guys think your doing?” Kenshin yelled at them. “Picking on a little kid, that’s really low.”

“You think we care?” One of the boys said.

“We do it because it’s fun.” Said the other.

“Oh really you think it’s fun to pick on little kids?” Kenshin said cracking his kuckles. “Then why don’t you pick on someone your own size?”

Unforchanetly for these boyrs Kenshin was a foot taller then them and a lot stronger, but Kenshin went easy on them and gave them both a black eye.
“Don’t you ever let me catch you picking on him or anyone else again or it will be much worse next time.” Kenshin said stareing the boys down.

They noded and ran away. Kenshin then walked over to Ryan who was siting on the ground crying and was covered in dirt. Kenshin picked him up and brushed the dirt off of him and then hugged him and saw that he had wet and messed himself in fear when the boys here picking on him.

“Hey lil bro, I’m here, I’m here, it’s gonna be ok now.” Said kenshin as he held Ryan in his arms.
“I was so scared Kenny.” Sobbed Ryan as he barried his head into Kenshin’s sholder.
"I know Ryan, big brother is here and it’s alright I took care of them, maybe next time they’ll think next time they want to pick on a little kid, come on lets get you home.”

Kenshin held Ryan in his arms and grabed his diaper bag and walked back to the car. Kenshin put Ryan in his carseat and they drove home in silance.

When they got home Kenshin took Ryan out of his carseat and carryed him to the door were Kenshin unlocked it and carryed Ryan into the kitchen and sat him how at the table and went to the freezer and wraped some ice cubes in a wash rag and dabed Ryan’s cheek lightly to try and get the swelling to go down and it did after having that on after a few minutes.

Kenshin then put the ice in the sink and took Ryan to his room and layed him on the changing table and took off all this dirty clothes and changed his diaper and then dressed him in a sleeper.

“Now you wait right there and I’ll be back in a minute.” Kenshin said with a smile.

Kenshin came returned a few minutes later with a bottle of warm milk. He picked up Ryan and sat down in the rocking chair by his crib and cuddled him as he drank his milk and just rocked him slowly and when he was done kenshin took the bottle from him, layed him in his crib and handed him a stuffed aniamal and rubbed his fingures throught his hair.

“Night lil brother, sweet dreams.” Smiled Kenshin, and with that he closed the certions and turned on his night light and left the door a crack and then went to clean the kitchen. Once he was down with that kenshin layed down on the couch and fell asleep.
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omg that made me so sad
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