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Old 03-04-2008   #11 (permalink)
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I don't think you made this mistake on the old site when you posted. So I'll just say that intil is not how you spell until. You did it sevral times.
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there was a good bit of mistakes but im not a spelling natzee lol so i wont correct u i like it the way it is
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I was just pointing it out because I know people will be confused of what he is trying to say.
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While I understand how it contributes to the plot, why would a bunch of teenagers tease and attack a boy who looks like he's two?
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It's life people are a holes. They probably knew that he was really not two.
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That's one thing that's kinda of anoying. I like all the comments but I hate when people try to analize my writing tor try and figure out what I was thinking and stuff, oh well chapter 3 will be up tomarrow morning and don't worry this one has been spell checked.
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Ok here it is.

Chapter 3


Kenshin was fast asleep on the couch but was then awoken by someone calling his name. Kenshin opened his eyes and after a few secants he relised that Ryan was calling him, so Kenshin got up from the couch and went into Ryan’s room and there he was standing up in his crib all full of energy.

“Hey lil bro.” Kenshin said as he walked over to Ryan and looked carefully at his cheek. It was still swollen but it went down a lot from when kenshin had put him to bed. “Are you feeling better?”

“Yeah a lot better.” Ryan said smiling.

“Good.” Kenshin said with a smile and lifted Ryan out of his crib, and taking to the changing table. Kenshin changed him and dressed him in a t-shirt and shorts and then lifted him up so he was sitting on the table.

“Kenny.”

“Yes” Said Kenshin with a puzzled look.

“Thanks for taking care of those bullies for me.” Ryan said with a big smile on his face hugging Kenshin.

“It’s no problem, I will always protect you, no body messes with my lil bro and gets away with it.” Kenshin said as he picked Ryan up and took him to the living room and sat down on the couch with Ryan on his lap.

“I feel so safe when I’m with you big bro, your always there for me.” Ryan said smiling.

“It’s no problem Ryan, there’s something I want you to know.”

Ryan game kenshin a puzzled look.

“No matter what happens I will always be here and I will always help you in anyway I can.”

Ryan smiled at that and just then they heard a car pull up in the drive way.

“What they can’t be home already?” Kenshin glanced over at the clock which read 7:30pm.

“Wow.” Kenshin said slightly stunned. “How long were we asleep?”

Their parents walked in the door and saw the two boys together and their mom just smiled knowing everything went ok. Ryan got off of kenshin’s knee and ran over to hug there mom and Kenshin did the same.

“So how did it go today.” she asked as she hugged the two boys.

“It was fine we just hung out all day.” said Kenshin

“Kenny took really good care of me mommy.” Ryan said with a big smile.

“That’s great, but what happened to your face?” she asked picking up Ryan and studying his cheek.

“Some bullies beat me up mommy."

“Bullies, what happened?”

“I took Ryan to the park today and he was having the time of his life, but then some kids came up and started teasing him. I watched this happen because Ryan needs to learn how to fight his own battles because I’m not always going to be there to defend him, but the next thing I know they stopped teasing and started punching him and that’s when I stepped in and took care of them.” Kenshin proclamed proudly.

“You did, how?” their father asked.

“Well I pulled them off of Ryan, checked to see he wasn’t bleeding or anything mayor and then I gave the two boys black eyes to teach them that you don’t pick on little kids and you certainly don’t pick on my little brother.”

“Well I’m not happy that you beat them up, but I am happy that you protected Ryan.” their mother said smiling.

"Well other then that what did you guys do today.?” their father asked.

“I taught Ryan how to play Go and we watched TV together, that’s really all that happened.” Said kenshin.

“Well that’s good.” Said mom

“Now come to the kitchen there’s something we need to talk about.” Said dad.

All of them walked into the kitchen and Ryan sat in Kenshin’s lap.

“We have good news and bad news for you boys, what do you want to hear first?” Said dad.

Kenshin and Ryan looked at each other for a minute.
“Good news.” Said Kenshin finally.

“The good news it that we are about to have a lot of extra money around.”

Ryan and kenshin looked at each other and smiled for a minute and then composed themselves.

“Ok so what’s the bad news?” asked Ryan.

“Your mom and I have to leave to go on a business trip that's going to last about a month.”

Kenshin and Ryan’s mouths dropped wide open and they looked at each other.
“A whole month, but why?” asked Kenshin.

“We don’t really know but they said that we will be doing business with some very big clients for the company."

Ryan just sat there with his eyes wide open and then ran to their mom crying. She picked him up and hugged him.

“You can’t go for a whole month mommy.” sobbed Ryan.

“Awww honey we don’t want to go, but we have to we’re the only ones that can take this trip and if we don’t go there’s a chance we could loose our jobs.” she said cuddling Ryan in her arms.

“So what’s going to happen to us?” Asked Kenshin.

“You two are going to stay here.” said dad

“Kenshin you will be in charge and take care of Ryan. Life will be just as it is now except we won’t be here.”

“I see and how am I going to pay for food and things like that?”

“With this.” dad went into his wallet and pulled out a credit card.

“You are to use this only as needed to play for things like food and gas, you got that?”

Kenshin nodded and took the card from his father.
“So how is this going to work exactly, Ryan gets out of school before I do.”

“Don’t worry about that, we’ve talked to your grandparents and they have agreed to pick up Ryan from school and then you can drive to their house when you get out and pick him up.”

“Ok, so I guess that leaves one question when is it going to happen? When are you leaving?” asked Kenshin half wanting them to go and half not.

'In 1 week.” their mom said still holding a sobbing Ryan in her arms.

“1 week!” Ryan said now crying harder

“Sweetie you need to be strong. Mommy and daddy will miss you very much, but it’s ok because you’ll have Kenshin to look after you.”

Ryan dried his eyes and looked over at Kenshin and smiled. Kenshin smiled back.
“It’ll be ok lil bro, I’ll look after you and we’ll have a lot of fun.”

This made Ryan jump off of his mom and run to Kenshin.
“Well I guess that’s it, I know you 2 will be ok and if anything happens just call your grandparents.” dad said now happy knowing Kenshin would do a good job of watching over Ryan.

This boys nodded and then Kenshin picked up Ryan and took him to his room. This was a real treat for Ryan because Kenshin never let him in his room. Kenshin sat on the bed and sat Ryan next to him.
“A whole month with out mom and dad wow, this is going to be great.”

Ryan was still a little sad that his parents would be gone for a month but he knew that Kenshin wouldn’t let anything bad happen to him and he smiled.
“Kenny can I ask you something?”

“Sure lil bro what’s on your mind?"

“I’m still kind of scared about mommy and daddy leaving for so long, can I sleep in you room tonight?”

“Sure you can, anything to make my lil bro feel better.”

“Thanks big brother.” Ryan said smiling.

“No problem now lets get ready for bed I can see you getting tired.”

Ryan nodded and Kenshin took Ryan back to his room and changed him and dressed him in a sleeper and told Ryan to grab a stuffed animal to sleep with as Kenshin wheeled Ryan’s crib into his room.

Once that was done Kenshin went to the kitchen and came back with a bottle of warm milk, he put Ryan in his crib and gave him the bottle and read him his favorite bedtime story Goodnight Moon but before kenshin could finish Ryan was fast asleep.

Kenshin took the bottle from him said goodnight then crawled into his bed and fell asleep.
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This is brilliant I can't wait for the next chapter
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yeay! Ryan is so cute
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Chapter 4


The next few days went by and life was normal for the two brothers, but then came the day both boys have been dreading, the day that their parents had to leave for the month long trip. It was early in the morning when Kenshin and his parents woke up and met in the living room.

“I’ll go get Ryan and bring him down, he’s really going to miss you guys.”

Kenshin walked into Ryan’s room and then softly nudged his shoulder.
“Hey lil bro get up mom and dad will be leaving soon.”

Ryan’s eyes slowly opened and then looked over at Kenshin.
“Ah, big bro why did you wake me up?” said Ryan still half asleep and a little annoyed.

“Mom and dad are going to be leaving in a few minutes and I know you want to say goodbye.”

Ryan was fully awake now and Kenshin picked him up and took him to the living room and then set him down, he got up and ran to their mom and dad giving each of them a big hug.
“I don’t want you guys to leave.” Ryan sobbed into his mothers arms.

Mom sat Ryan in her lap and hugged him.
“We don’t want to go either but you need to be strong and you have your grandparents and Kenshin to look after you.”

This made Ryan stop and look at Kenshin that had sat down next to them.
“I’ll look after you lil bro, you can count on it.” Said Kenshin smiling
Ryan smiled to and crawled over to hug his brother.

“Well we need to get going and you two need to get ready for school.” Said their father.
The boys nodded and got up from the couch to help load up the car and then hugged there parents and wished them well.
“We will miss you, be good and be happy.” Said mom

They nodded and then stood by the front door waving as there parents drove off. Once they were out of sight kenshin closed the door and then turned to Ryan.
“Well now that that’s done we got to get ready.”

They then walked into Ryan’s room and got him changed and dressed for the day in a black t-shirt and blue jeans. Once that was done Kenshin took Ryan into the living room and turn the TV on and let Ryan watch Blue’s clues well kenshin went to his room.
Kenshin returned 20 minutes later dressed in black like always with his hair back in a ponytail wearing a black t-shirt, baggy cargo pants and wristbands.

“Ok lets get some breakfast, what are you hungry for?”

“Waffles" yelled Ryan excitedly

“You got it.” And within a few minutes Kenshin returned with a stack of waffles covered in syrup for the both of them and then changed the channel so they could watch Bleach as they ate.

When the show ended Kenshin looked over at the clock which read 6:30.
“Ok we better get going." he took the empty plates and put them in the sink and grabbed his and Ryan’s backpacks and tossed Ryan his then turned off the TV and grabbed his car keys.

“But were am I going to get on the bus? asked Ryan slightly puzzled.

“I made a deal with Rachel’s parents and you will be ridding the bus with her to school and then you will take the bus to her house in the afternoon and I will pick you up their."

Rachel was an 8 year old girl that Ryan had been friends with for a while now and Ryan had developed a crush on her a few weeks ago but was to embarrassed to admit it to her.

Ryan ran up to Kenshin
“Thank you so much Kenshin.” Ryan said with a big smile on his face.

Kenshin patted him on the head and they walked out the door and Kenshin reached into his pocket and pulled out his keys and locked the door and turned to walk to the car which Ryan was already there jumping up and down in existent. Kenshin unlocked the car and strapped Ryan into his car seat and then got in and they drove for about 5 minutes and then pulled into Rachel’s driveway and Kenshin let Ryan out of his car seat handed him his backpack and walked him to the door and rang the bell. Within a few seconds Rachel’s mom answered the door and greeted them with a smile.

“Alright now you be good and have fun at school, I’ll be here to pick you up at 3.” Said Kenshin as he kneeled down and gave his brother a hug.

“I will.” Ryan said with a big smile on his face.

Kenshin then got to his feet ruffed Ryan’s hair and then got back in the car and drove off he got to school and waited in there normal hang out spot for his friends to show up.

“Hey Ken-Chan” said Kadis as she gave him a hug and a kiss.

“Hey Kadis, how’s my Nee-Chan?”

“Good.” Said Kadis blushing a little bit.

“Hey Scheißen Sie Kopf.”

Kenshin and kadis turned to find Sandman walking toward them.

Josh a.k.a. Sandman was a tall, short-haired guy about 17 known for playing the tough guy act but everyone knew that he was a big softy at heart and just didn’t want to show it.

“Oh shut up baka.” said kadis and Kenshin at the same time.

“I see that you smoked this weekend.” said kenshin looking at Sandman seeing the tired weird look he always had after he smoked pot.

“You know that stuff is bad for you.”

All turned and saw jasmine walking toward them.
Jasmine a 15 year old native American girl that had the tendency to not act her age and instead act like a 5 yr old. She was very motherly, but also very immature and that’s what the group liked about her.

“Hey Kenshin, Kadis, Josh what’s up?” said Jasmine asked as she walked over and gave kenshin a hug like she did every morning which made Kadis give her one of her “let him go or I’ll kill you.” looks and Jasmine just smiled and let go.

“Nothing really just bored.” said Kenshin as he yawned.

”I see, now Josh are you going to tell me where you have the pot or and I going to have to make you?” said Jasmine with a stern look.

“Your going to have to make me.” Josh said smiling.

“Very well.” Jasmine turned around to compose herself for a minute and then turned around really fast and kick Josh square in the nuts which made him drop to the ground and clutch his crotch in pain.

“Now are you going to tell me?”

Josh nodded and reached into his pocket pulling out a case containing five joints in it and gave it to Jasmine.

“See how easy that was.” Said Jasmine with a smile on her face with Kenshin and Kadis laughing at what had just taken place.

Jasmine walked over to the trash can and throw it away.

“Damn” said Josh now getting to his feet.

“You got to admit she has a point Sandman, you really should really lay off the magic plants for a while.” said kenshin now sitting one a nearby table with Kadis sitting on his lap.

“Never!, I’m a pot head until I…”

Josh’s voice trilled off when he saw Jasmine getting ready for another kick.

“I’ll be good.” Said Josh finally

“Good.” Said Jasmine with a smile on her face as she went over and hugged him.

Just then the bell rang and is startled Jasmine causing her to yell into Josh’s ear.

“Dang already, oh well see you all at lunch.” Said Kenshin getting off the table and he started to grab his bag and walk off when he felt something tugging on his shirt. He turned around and Kadis was looking at him with puppy dog eyes.

“Forgetting something Ken-Chan?”

“Aww how could I forget?” Kenshin hugged and kissed Kadis and then gave her a smile.

“Now that’s better.” Kadis said with a smile on her face.

“I’ll miss you Kadis.”

“I’ll miss you too Ken-Chan.”

They kissed once more and then everyone walked to their classes. The day what really boring for kenshin the same routine:
1. Reading
2. American history
3. Computer systems and technology
4. Geometry
5. Lunch
6. Earth/Space Science
7. PC Support
And finally
8. English 3
After school he met Kadis by the bus ramp.

“What are you doing here, I got a car you know.”

“I know but I was wanting to talk with my friends on the bus.”

“I’m going to go pick up Ryan at his friends house.”

This made Kadis smile and blush a little bit.
“Ok you win.” Kadis said still smiling and kissing him on the cheek.

“Yay, he’ll be happy to see you.” Said Kenshin with a smile

They walked to Kenshin’s car and drove over to Rachel’s house. They got and walked to the door and rang the bell Rachel’s mom came to the door and greeted them with a smile.

"Hey Kenshin who's this?”

“This is my friend Kadis.” Said Kenshin with a grin.

Rachel and Ryan walked to the frount door to see what was going on and when Ryan saw it was Kenshin he ran over and gave him a big hug.

“Hey lil bro, look who I brought a lot with me.” Ryan turned to see Kadis and he squealed with delight.

“Hi sweetie.” Said Kadis with a smile and hugged Ryan and Kenshin in a big hug which made Ryan blush.

“You ready to go home?” asked Kenshin

“Not just yet.” Said Ryan as he looked over at Rachel

Kenshin got the message and let Ryan down and he went over and gave Rachel a big hug.

‘I’ll see you tomorrow.” Ryan said smiling.

Rachel gave him a little kiss on the cheek and made Ryan blush

“Ok big bro, I’m ready.” Said Ryan walking back to kenshin and Kadis smiling and still a little red.

They all said goodbye and then they walked to the car, Kenshin strapped Ryan in his car seat, and then they drove off in the direction of Kadis’s house.
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