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    When the sun sets my mind can not sleep. The moon provokes my inner thought.the stars an audience I can not appease.
    Traveling from one monologue to the next stopping for a moment on saturns rings.
    When I try to catch my breath I remember Iím in space
    Donít dare nod off
    For the sun wants more as it again shines upon my face.

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    Hmmm... Let me think about this one... Insomnia?

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    this is really good! I like the elements of outer space, and the transition back to morning at the end with a reluctance I sense there. Your line, "When I try to catch my breath I remember I'm in space" could be a reference to anxiety/not being able to breathe/when your chest feels tight at night and the thoughts are pouring in. I can relate to that feeling. Really good imagery and wording. Do you write poetry consistently?

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    Quote Originally Posted by charmingotter View Post
    this is really good! I like the elements of outer space, and the transition back to morning at the end with a reluctance I sense there. Your line, "When I try to catch my breath I remember I'm in space" could be a reference to anxiety/not being able to breathe/when your chest feels tight at night and the thoughts are pouring in. I can relate to that feeling. Really good imagery and wording. Do you write poetry consistently?
    you nailed the interpretation! kindred spirits? maybey, and poetry is something that I do for fun or when I need to get something off my chest, it also sparks when I am having a hard time.

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