Kidnapped [mature content]

[Todd]

Jake, I thought you did a fantastic job on the story. The story was emotional, thrilling, and kept me wanting to read on.

I do wish to add a comment more related to my personal feelings concerning the story:

In my line of work I have seen far to much abuse including sexual abuse of children. Because of that I am not entirely comfortable reading even fiction about such activities. I do understand how you fit that into your story and while reading the story at first I wondered if it was even necessary to include that in the story. The ending made it clear that such a threat was necessary to prompt the actions of Jared and thus it was a necessary part of the story.

I feel as though you are a talented writer and do hope to read more of your work. For my personal tastes, I would much prefer to read a story that does not include the exploitation of children.

[Atsu]

Originally Posted by Todd

Jake, I thought you did a fantastic job on the story. The story was emotional, thrilling, and kept me wanting to read on.

I do wish to add a comment more related to my personal feelings concerning the story:

In my line of work I have seen far to much abuse including sexual abuse of children. Because of that I am not entirely comfortable reading even fiction about such activities. I do understand how you fit that into your story and while reading the story at first I wondered if it was even necessary to include that in the story. The ending made it clear that such a threat was necessary to prompt the actions of Jared and thus it was a necessary part of the story.

I feel as though you are a talented writer and do hope to read more of your work. For my personal tastes, I would much prefer to read a story that does not include the exploitation of children.

He has a few other stories that have no abuse in them. Actually this is the only one that does I think.

[legobaby]

Now that took some time to read but it was BRILLIANT!!!

[Baby Jake]

Originally Posted by Todd

Jake, I thought you did a fantastic job on the story. The story was emotional, thrilling, and kept me wanting to read on.

I do wish to add a comment more related to my personal feelings concerning the story:

In my line of work I have seen far to much abuse including sexual abuse of children. Because of that I am not entirely comfortable reading even fiction about such activities. I do understand how you fit that into your story and while reading the story at first I wondered if it was even necessary to include that in the story. The ending made it clear that such a threat was necessary to prompt the actions of Jared and thus it was a necessary part of the story.

I feel as though you are a talented writer and do hope to read more of your work. For my personal tastes, I would much prefer to read a story that does not include the exploitation of children.

Thank you for your input.

But I have to ask. If your line of work involves such atrocities to real children and it bothers you to read even fictional accounts of such things (and it should), then why would you read anything in this story past the content advisory that is provided at the beginning of this story?

When writing this story I did know that the content would offend some readers - which is fine. But that is why I added the content advisory in bright red text to forewarn such readers of the things included in this story.

With that said: I did only include the things that I felt were absolutely necessary to the plot of the story. Believe me when I tell you that I thought very long, and very hard about the ending, and "what happens to Jared mid-way through the story" (putting it that way to avoid spoilers). I am glad you did notice that, because it has always been my fear that people would think I just threw in random violent scenes for fun. I personally believe I have done a decent job with this story (though I always think there is room for improvement).

Finally... as Blake had said... I do have other stories written (and uploaded here on this site) that do not involve "the exploitation of children". This is also the only story that involves such dark themes.

That is after all why I wrote it. This story is meant to offend, in a way. In my opinion, if you read this story and you weren't even slightly taken back by some of the things in this story... then I either didn't do my job as a writer correctly, or you need mental help

[baseball4life]

Well said, Jake. You did a great job, and the fact that the story offended is what made it so thrilling and gripping to read. Novels that are thrilling reads tend to do the same thing, and the kind of writing that you are capable of is worthy of a novel, in my opinion.

[secret101]

Dude this is amazing, I liked how the brotherly part with ethan and jared was more implied then up front, it made it very interesting. Also your pace and style are very very good and kept me latched to the story untill the very end, I might even go as far to say that you have some potential at being a writer! )ABDL content aside(I also wanna say that this is probably the best story of this genre I have ever read, and I have read some good ones.

Kudos man!

[ricky]

Hey Jake,

I was really captivated by your story. It was really well written, and keeps you at the edge of your seat with the suspense and twists. I did find the abuse unsettling, but I see why you included it.
I know this will probably sound weird, but I almost felt like I wanted to be Jared in this story. Not because of the abuse, I hate that, I've had my own share,, but because of the love given to him by his family and friends. I don't know if this makes sense or not, but I have always wanted to be loved like that. My own parents never ever showed any kind of affection to me, so any kind of attention, good or bad, would at least feel like somebody was paying attention to me.

I'll have to read the other stories you've written now. Keep up the good work kiddo!

[liloneinmymind]

The story was great, i just wish they would have liked there "mommy" more.

[kenshi]

This was probably one of the most brutal and offensive *B/DL stories I have ever read. And I wouldn't have it any other way. I can't wait to read your other stories!

[ThunderMa14]

I had mixed feelings about this story. You're just an amazing writer- period. But, i must admit it was pretty creepy. XP I was kind of befuzzled at how much detail some of the... less "Happy" parts had.

Although, you still had me completely sucked into the story, and i thought it was great.