Discovery

[Mazza]

this story has nothing to do with discovery besides the fact that Amy (the main character) in this time of capture discovered that she liked diapers(she didn't know why she was to young to know why, she found out a couple years later while browsing online, she found this site). this story is Fictional and is what i wrote for an english class assigment- a 600-1000 word( in other words a short story) narrative/story so here it is.(btw i already showed it to her today as a draft,and she just said i needed to edit a couple areas of the story by showing me where and circling/writing comments in places that needed inprovment)

P.S.i didnt read this post after i wrote is so i dont know what i wrote just than. heres the story.


Discovery
It was a Friday; a family (dad: Jerry, mom: casey, daughter: amy) driving from Mexico had car trouble, and later their car broke down in the middle of know where. They stayed the night in the car after looking for food and water (the mobile phone had no signal). At around 2:56 AM Amy heard a noise and freaked out, she shrieked and cried like a baby. She struggled as rag, moist with chloroform was forced over her mouth. The unknown assailant, later known as Tom carried her to his car, and drove off in a red Ford Falcon.
Amy woke up, she felt groggy and tired. Amy struggled, she looked around and noticed that she was in a spacious nursery; it had a large crib (one that she would be able to fit into easily), changing table, a shelf full of cloth diapers, and at the edge of the shelf, a container filled to the brim with safety pins, a couple pairs of plastic pants, all near the container containing the safety pins, and plenty of diaper changing supplies like baby powder, baby lotion, and baby rash cream. That’s when she looked down and saw the huge diaper on her. She just stared at it, hypnotized with shock and distress. Amy tried to take it off, but she couldn’t, because she was in a pair of footed pajamas with the zipper at the back. Amy couldn’t reach the zipper so she couldn’t take it off to take the diaper off. Amy noticed that her diaper felt wet, so she must have wet herself, and she could smell an odor it smelt of crap. That’s when she cried. She must have messed her diaper.
A tall man who looked very fatherly, with brown hair and concerned looking eyes walked in, and said. Sorry that you’re here, but you were acting so immature by nagging your mom about everything.” Oh mom this, oh dad that”. So your dad told a friend how immature you were. I don’t know why but your dad’s friend decided that you needed to be taught a lesson. So you dad’s friend told another friend, and he told another friend and that’s how you ended up here.
Amy nodded and said, why this in a toddler voice (she was actually 10 yrs old at the time), she didn’t know why she was talking like a toddler, maybe it was because she had wet and messed her diapers. Maybe it was because the man was carrying a baby bottle filled with formula and a couple jars of baby food. Maybe it was because she was dressed in baby cloths. Maybe the cause was from the man slipping drugs into her earlier. Whatever the reason, she didn’t know why, but she was talking in a toddler voice.
The man said his name was Tom. He smelt the stench in the air, that’s when tom decided that Amy needed a diaper change. At first she didn't want one, but when Tom said that Amy wouldn’t get anything to eat or drink and, even wouldn’t get another diaper change for the rest of the day if she did not behave, that was when she decided to play along and us/do whatever Tom told her, and even act like a toddler in hopes that if she did, that she would be able to get out of that place faster. In the mean time Amy's parents were fretting about her and constantly looking for here, and even filed a missing persons report.
So for the next two and a half months she did exactly as tom told her. After a while Amy could see Tom dropping his guard, She also noticed that she didn’t even know when she pooped or peed. She had lost control of her bladder and bowels. So she had to use the diapers even if she didn’t want to, because if she didn’t she would mess what ever she was wearing. So after about two and a half months after her disappearance Tom said to Amy well I think you have learnt your leson, Do you want to go back home now? Amy couldn't answer as she had a pacifier in her mouth and had been talking baby talk for so long that she forgot how to speak at all, but she still understood. So she just nodded her head.
That night Tom put a drug in Amy's formula so she would forget that she had even been there (in that nursery she had been living in for the past 2 and a half months).
Tom put a sleeping pill in Amy’s formula, and took her while she was still asleep and drove her back to her house. Tom gently put her in her back in her bed and also tucked her in.
Late in the night Amy woke up crying and ran to her mom's bedroom crying, that is when she messed her pajama. Amy started to cry harder. Casey called the cops and told them that she found her child, the cops asked where she was. Casey told the cops that Amy ran to her from her bedroom with wet pajamas. Casey drove the car to the shop and bought a couple packs of diapers(Amy was the thankfully in the middle to large diaper size) and drove home. When Casey got home she had a talk with Amy about the accidents she was having and told her that she now needs diapers if she liked it or not. Amy just stared at her mom and nodded as Amy could not talk properly, so Casey seeing that Amy did not mind that she had to wear diapers due to her incontinent state, just hugged her daughter.
The End – Fin

[Amox]

Its all right. There are some grammatical errors, and it was short, but it was all right.

Edit: nvm for all who saw the last line

[Pojo]

Very unbelievable...And a bit too straightforward...Otherwise it was good I suppose

[betagame]

you cant get completely incontinent in 2 1/2 months
or loose your speech
other thatn that, nice story

[Mazza]

lol i said fictional, as in the flying pigs fictional, not the Hollywood-astronaughts on moon fictional.btw thanks for the nice comments, its the first story i wrote.lol.

[Mazza]

lol btw. can i get 1 rep for the story??. pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaaaaaaaasssssssssssssss eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee.lol



EDIT:dang i lost a rep,thats bad.soz for askin for rep.lol.

[moocow]

i can say, one thing i noticed wrong was around here.

That’s when she looked down and saw the huge diaper on her. She just stared at it, hypnotized with shock and distress. Amy tried to take it off, but she couldn’t, because she was in a pair of footed pajamas with the zipper at the back. Amy couldn’t reach the zipper so she couldn’t take it off to take the diaper off.

how can you look down and see something through clothing. I mean I guess you can probably see the bulge, but other than that, she probably didn't really see it.

granted, I was just digging into the story.

[BabyGrizzy]

it seems more like a role play. Way too strait forward, a LOT of errors, if it was longer, then it would be MUCH better, that and fix all the errors-- get the OpenOffice suite. openoffice.org

[Lone_Wolf]

it was good but short overall it was fair.

[secret101]

dont start every sentence with “Amy” or a charachers name once or twice but no more