light in darkness

[snydead]

This is a type of story that I wish that could truly happen to me. Hope you like it.

[note: i'm not good with adding details but you can think of the details your self, if you think of details then it would almost be like you were there in the story. i just got done with editing this story and sorry if there are still a few errors.]

Part 1 October 1st, day light, It was a rainy day and I was in my small normal room surrounded by my wonderful cat posters. And for some reason I feel depressed...

I was sitting alone on my bed wearing only a diaper and was looking through my window, looking at the rain hitting the road. Mom walked in my room and said with anger

"what are you doing!?...Why are you wearing diapers!?"
I was speach less.

Mom said "Get dressed we're leaving."
I was still speachless and I could not even ask where we're going.

I gotten dressed and headed out the door and into the car. As I was sitting in the car I saw my mom walking out the door in saddness, then i started to cry. Mom came in the car without saying a word, she just started the car and began to drive.
As we were driving I was looking out side at the rain through the window and said to myself.

"I'm All ALONE...I will never find anyone who is like me and why am I so DIFFERENT?"
Mom drove into a parking lot near a big building,

Mom said "Come on, were going to be late."

I walked inside the building with her and we approached a desk and a man said "You must be Adam. Well I am Doctor Smith."

I didn't say a word yet but the doctor had asked me and mom to follow him to a conferance room to talk, sadly I had to oblige (go with it).

We came into the room and sat down at a table and doctor Smith said "Your mom tells me that you like to wear diapers... is that true?"

I said "yes" and started to cry.

Dr. Smith said "You truly do have a child like heart and that is ok to act like a child. What you got is called infantilism and if you like diapers aswell then you also have diaper fetishism. Surly what you have is not normal but you act like a child either for attension or to make you feel happy and there is nothing wrong with acting like a child, you just like to be cared for by others that's all. You are who you are and that is what you'll be forever."

Mom said "I feel as if i'm not being a good parent if I let my son act like a child"

Dr. Smith replied "You are a great parent maybe that's why your son likes getting a lot of attension from other people. It is only natural for a parent to care for there son but the best thing you can ever do is except your son for who he is and instead of being distant from him. Try showing him that you still love him no matter what he does. You got to prove to him that you still love him since he feels alone and in a depressive state."

Mom said "Thanks doctor I will keep that in mind."
Finally the talk was over and mom and I headed out to the car.

When we got into the car mom said "Sorry for the way how I acted, I was just scared that's all." I didn't know what to say to her, so I just kept quiet.

When we came home I noticed that there was a moving van next door to our house and we figured that someone was moving in. I saw a man and a woman coming out of there car (I guessed that they we're husband and wife.) and plus I saw a kid that was my age, a 17 yr. old boy. Knowing my shyness i was afraid to talk to him and make a new friend so I waited.

Part 2 October 14, Day light, Two weeks have passed and things had finally started to get better with my mom. Mom was at a point were she didn't really care for my TBDL and the bright side is, she's letting me were diapers.

I decided to go out side for some air, when I walked outside I heard someone crying. When I looked around I saw the new next door neighbor kid crying.

I walked over to the kid and asked "What's wrong?"

The kids response was "Why would you care?"

I said "I can't stand to see other people suffer in saddness, by the way names Adam."

"I'm Andy"

"What's wrong?"

"I don't feel comfortable talking to another person about this problem that I have."

"I know what your going through, I can't even talk to my mom about the problem that I have without her freaking out."

"Same here I know what you mean, have you ever felt lonley?"

"All the time. And how about you?"

"I feel like I'm alone all the time" said Andy with his head nodded down.

To cheer him up I said "Maybe we can be friends and talk to eachother about our problems. So that way we both wouldn't feel alone."

Andy said "Even though we just met, do you think that you can sleep over so that way we can talk and get to know eachother?"

Right away I said "That will be great."

I rushed home and asked mom if I can stay the night at Andy's and she said that it was alright. I walked next door and Andy said that his parents said that it was alright.

Andy and I walked in his house and noticed that the house was really beautiful and It's a two floor house with a lot of space. The walls were painted sky blue and the living room that I saw when I first came was very big it had two leather seat couches and also had a big screen T.V.

I said "You have a great house."

Andy replied "Thanks. Anyways what would you like to do?"

"Since it's my first time being here, how about you decide."

"Ok. Hmmm would you like to see my room?"

I said "Sure."

As we walked up stairs I saw Four doors and only one door was closed. Andy first showed me the bathroom, the guest room and his mom and dad's room.

We stoped in front of the closed door and Andy said "This is my room, I don't really let anyone see my room but for some reason I feel that I can trust you enough. Promise me that you will still accept me as a friend no matter what."

I said "I don't judge people by the way they look, act and say. Surly you can trust me. I give you my word."

Andy said "Thank's that was really assuring. but before I open the door I must tell you about the problem that I have."

"You can tell me anything and I will still not judge you."

"Ok. here it goes... The... the problem that I have... the problem that i have is that... that... I.. I uh.. I like to wear diapers..." Andy quickly turned his back on me. I stood there in shock because I thought that I would never find a friend who is just like me i gotten really happy and excited.

I placed my hand on Andy's shoulder and said "You're not alone."

Andy said "What do you mean?"

"I to like to wear diapers and I thought that I would never have the chance to meet someone who likes to wear them."

Andy's frown started to turn into a very big smile and he became very excited and said "I also thought that I would never find anyone like me... well I guess then I'll show you my room." Andy opened the door slowly and I saw a dresser, a tv on a table and plus I saw a crib that looked especially made for a teenager. I walked over to the crib and saw an empty baby bottle, a teddy bear and a small size pacifire.

I said right away "I think that I'll like it here."

Part 3 October 14, Night, When I saw Andy's room I was in Shock by excitement. I really wish that I had a room like his.

Downstairs Andy's mom said "Andy and Adam It's time to eat."

We both went downstairs and Andy's mom had walked up to me and said "Sorry Adam for not introducing my self, I was busy cooking dinner. My name is Flo and right now Andy's dad is at the office and his name is Bill."

We all walked into the kitchen and sat at the table. I looked In the middle of the table and i saw a pot and it had Macaroonie and cheese w/tuna, which was my favorite food.

Flo said to Andy "Does Adam know about you know what?"

Andy said "Yeah, he knows."

Flo got up and walked over to the cabinet door and grabbed out a baby bottle and filled it with grape juice and placed it next to Andy. I sat there looking at his bottle and I felt kind of jealous that he has a bottle.

Andy said to me "Snydead would you like a bottle of juice too?"

I said "You read my mind. Sure I would like a bottle too."

Flo had got up again and filled another bottle of juice and placed it in front of me. I sat there for a minute looking at the bottle, hoping this day would never end from all of the exicitement that I had, I felt like I was in heaven. I started to suck on the bottle happily and with no difficulty and we all began to eat.

When we were done eating Andy and I went back to his room and he grabbed out his x-box and said "You want to play Halo?" and I nodded my head yes. As he pressed the on switch of his x-box he said "Are you wearing a diaper right now?"

I said shyly "Yes..."

"Me too, maybe tonight we can wear just diapes since it's going to be really hot in here." I felt the excitment building inside since I never really went to bed wearing only a diaper. So I had agreed with Andy to wear only a diaper for bed. We then played several games of halo on multiplayer and he kept on winning (sigh).

A few minutes later Flo came into the room and said "it's time to go to bed now."

"Alright mom." Andy said,

Flo said right away "Do you need a change?"

"yes..." Andy said shyly

"Ok then lie down on your back."

Andy laid down and Flo went to his closet and grabbed baby wipes, baby powder and a fresh diaper. Flo walked over to Andy and nealed down as she she was unbuttoning his pants and pulling them down to his knees. She then had undone the tapes of the diaper.

She then took off his diaper and said "My you are wet, I'm glad that it didn't leak through."

She then wiped him with the baby wipes and used alot of baby powder and then she placed another diaper on him.

Andy looked at me and said "Do you need a change?"

I stood there in Shock when he said that. I didn't know what to say so I just nodded my head.

Flo said "It's alright, I can change you." I laid down on my back, not saying a word. Flo had left Andy in his diapaer and t-shirt then she came over to me and undone my pants and pulled them down to my knees.

Then She started to undo the tapes of the diaper and she said while smiling "Your also wet."

She then took off the diaper and used the baby wipes and she also used the baby powder.

Lastly she placed another diaper on me and said "Now you should feel a lot more better." I nodded my head in amazement, I really liked all of the attension that I have been getting. Flo Had walked out of the room and left me in my diaper and t-shirt.

Andy and I took off our shirts and we stood up only in our diaper. Andy said "Would you like to sleep in the crip tonight?"

I said "What about you?"

"I'm fine on the floor besides it's good for my back."

"Ok."

I got into the crib and Andy grabbed his teddy bear and raised up the side bars and said "The pacifire is brand new, you can have it if you want to."

"REALLY!!!!" I said excitedly

"Yup. Think of it as a thank you gift for being my new best friend."

"Thanks. umm Andy?"

"Yeah"

"When you were crying today, what was the matter?"

"I felt alone with my TBDL. Now thanks to you I don't have to be alone any more. I'm really glad to have met you."

"And I am really glad to have met you. Goodnight."

"Goodnight."

I placed the pacifire in my mouth and said to myself "I guess that life isn't really all that hard just as long as you have hope. Now i'm not ALONE anymore."

THE END

Message: There maybe alot of you who lived alone in darkness (Suffering, anger and saddness.) but you got to think that there is always light in darkness and that light is hope.

[Chromos]

Not bad.. but there are some things I'd like to critique.

1.)I think it would be best if you chose an actual name for the main character. I know you want to put yourself into this story, but I don't think that using you user name of "snydead" is the best option, mainly because it gives the character an inhuman quality. Plus, it makes it sound wierd when he introduces himsels as that, and the other person doesn't go "What?!", and acts like it's normal..

2.There are several spelling/ grammar mistakes that stand out; such as extra words that don't go with the rest, typos, some spelling mistakes, and left out punctuation marks. Sometimes the marks you used didn't match up to the vibe I was getting. Also, I would like to point out, that the dialogue seems rather unrealistic.. These two guys just barely met, and their already spilling their guts out to each other..

3.)You wrote this fast, didn't you? It shows because you jump from one thing to the next rather quickly on several parts. You also don't go into a lot of detail. I know you said that you aren't good at that, and I understand that, but adding description to things can really help the reader to understand the characters environment. Also, the way that the time line moves is fast.. From the time that he was caught by his mom, to the time where he was sent to a doctor was about two sentences.. His mom didn't even seem to make an appointment that I could see.

4.)Be sure to remember that a new paragrah starts anytime a new person speaks.

That's all for now! I hope I helped somewhat..

[snydead]

I'll try to work hard next time. LOL!!! Sometimes my spelling isn't good and a lot of times when i read for mistakes, puncuation I tend to skip over it without noticing.

[Chromos]

I was bit rude on that last post.. sorry about that.. didn't mean to sound so demanding..

[snydead]

Chromos you Are right. You did make a good point
I just got done with editing the story. LOL!!!
I hope that i made it better. WOOT,WOOT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[woof]

You might want to go back to the editing.

For example:

"What's wrong?" The kids response was "Why would you care?" I said "I can't stand to see other people suffer in saddness, by the way names Adam." "I'm Andy" "What's wrong?" "I don't feel comfortable talking to another person about this problem that I have." "I know what your going through, I can't even talk to my mom about the problem that I have without her freaking out.""Same here I know what you mean, have you ever felt lonley? "All the time. And how about you?" "I feel like I'm alone all the time" said Andy with his head nodded down. To cheer him up I said "Maybe we can be friends and talk to eachother about our problems. So that way we both wouldn't feel alone." Andy said "Even though we just met, do you think that you can sleep over so that way we can talk and get to know eachother?" Right away I said "That will be great." I rushed home and asked mom if I can stay the night at Andy's and she said that it was alright. I walked next door and Andy said that his parents said that it was alright.

Would become:

"What's wrong?"

The kids response was "Why would you care?"

I said "I can't stand to see other people suffer in saddness, by the way names Adam."

"I'm Andy"

"What's wrong?"

"I don't feel comfortable talking to another person about this problem that I have."

"I know what your going through, I can't even talk to my mom about the problem that I have without her freaking out."

"Same here I know what you mean, have you ever felt lonley? "All the time. And how about you?"

"I feel like I'm alone all the time" said Andy with his head nodded down.

To cheer him up I said "Maybe we can be friends and talk to eachother about our problems. So that way we both wouldn't feel alone."

Andy said "Even though we just met, do you think that you can sleep over so that way we can talk and get to know eachother?"

Right away I said "That will be great."

I rushed home and asked mom if I can stay the night at Andy's and she said that it was alright. I walked next door and Andy said that his parents said that it was alright.

But even then, the dialogue is really corny and completely unrealistic. It's basically: "Hey, I know we JUST met and I have no idea who you are, but I totally feel like trusting you completely and revealing my absolute darkest secret!"

"Golly, that's swell! Let's be friends forever! Now I'm not lonely!"

So I'd encourage you to make the dialogue a bit more... believeable. Also, you don't need the "Message" at the end. The story's message should be implicit, not explicit.

But, good shot at it. With a little editing it will be a good story.

[Chromos]

Yes, woof would be correct. When I say there should be a new paragraph, that's what I meant.