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Old 14-04-2008   #11 (permalink)
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Please write more Jake, the way you wrote this I think you should continue it and keep the story going.
You know, I've been really thinking about it. Theres a lot of people that like this story for what it is (a better written version of more than half the stories that are on Deeker's site).

I left out certain details for a possible sequel if I ever decided to write one... and I'll admit I have a little document in my stories folder that has some ideas for a continuation. No promises though.

Have you read any of the other stories I've posted on here? Just curious.

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wow nice story! even though im striaght,i was fine with the graphic part lol anywayz.....really nice job keep it up! =]
lol thanks man.

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Sorry for being unclear. The one I just read before that was David Mayter, the one you said you wrote around 2004. Comparing the two I really saw how much more polished this one was, so that's what I was trying to explain in my last post.

Thanks for taking my criticism the way it was intended, and that is to be constructive. Sorry if you had second thoughts about that, I criticize a lot of stories on here, though most of that was on the old forums. I guess what I was trying to say was that I really liked the story except for the more explicit scenes, which were a bit more detailed than is usually seen on ADISC. It's OK though because you gave us a warning, and I chose to read on in spite of it.

--Danny
Thanks for clarifying man, I knew what you meant but I couldn't help be confused. I understand its a bit over the top for what this board is used to seeing, and I was actually really reluctant at first to even post it here originally because of that. Glad you liked it
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wow.......i have a really big imagination when it comes to reading stories.

I'm really tierd right now and when I'm tierd I can pitcher things very clearly in my head, and I swear well i was reading the story it was like i was their.

This was one of the best stories I have ever readed and I really hope you do more on continuation of this first one.
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Write more, I demand MOAR!
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They fired eachothers lazors.
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nicer story. Did you really experience this???
Where was the source
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All in my imagination, unfortunately
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this is a better adaptation of half the deekers stories
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Good Story hope you write more it was very good
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The best adjectives I can think of to define this story are "overwhelmingly sweet".

I just read it all at a time. The clean writing style makes it a pleasure to read it, and the play of emotions between the two characters is vividly described with richness of details. You may not have experienced this in real life (let's admit it - it'd be too good to be true!) but I for sure can tell you were feeling every bit of it as you wrote it.
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Do the Math.
if the two wet only once and got changed,
those must be some thin diapers.
but the two flooded.
What kinda diapers did you base this story off of?
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