The Baby Machine

[toddler82uk]

The Baby Machine
Summary: This is about an adult who has a very rich person who made stuff for a living and finds a strange machine. This is not a true story and amazing what dreams do.
Somewhere in the year of 2030 junior was on a train travailing to one of his close friends who was very rich but not rich in any way that he don’t like to spend allot of money on himself but to make things from any sort of metal and plastic. His friend know that junior wears a nappy from his past of being bulled in his life and wanted to be young where he escaped life. About 1 hour into the train ride that he started to fell asleep and then suddenly he started to wet himself and lucky he was wearing a plain white nappy which was very thick and it showed when junior open is bottoms that there was a little yellow stain mark so he just sit back and let it flew. One of the staff on the train started to say “the next station is our finally station of .....” and junior got is bag and began to move from his seat and quickly checked to see in case he did not leak and grabbed his bag from the bag holder and made his way to the doors. The train came to a standstill and junior push on the button to open the doors and there was is daddy all nice and dressed and said “its nice to see you again little one” and junior with a great grin on his face jump of the train and went straight into his arms and gave him a great hug. His daddy said “its been a long time I know but allot as change” junior said “what happened ?” and his dad said “well some numbers came up on the lottery and got a nice amount of money” and junior said “many congrats” and his dad replied “I have been making some great stuff which I hope to sell soon...come on let’s get you home” daddy grab junior by his hand and led him to his car which was the same thing he seen him last time when he met him. Daddy put junior in his car seat and drove off, when they arrive junior looked out of the car window to see in shocked a big Manson house which was so beautiful that he wanted to live there. Daddy went up the driveway and stopped outside the front door and got out and open where junior was sitting and left him out and could feel that junior was wet and said “my I take it you soon was wet when you got here” junior looked up and said “I could not hold it” and his daddy said “don’t worry we’ll just see how you are wet” daddy then got his hand and checked on junior to see he was ok and “you be ok and should last you for the rest of the day” junior then went inside and his daddy grab his bag and taken him in.
Inside the house there was loads of strange machines and junior looked around and daddy said “I have been working on loads of strange things and so many ideas coming to me” junior then was led to his bedroom where he had a cot to sleep in and the room covered in a nursery style wallpaper. “This is where you be sleeping for couple of days” daddy said and junior seen a strange plastic chair and next to it a machine which look like a large box/fridge type thing. Daddy said “don’t try and touch anything please while staying in here” but junior had other thoughts... when daddy lifted the room for junior to play in his toy box which was at the end of his cot he crawled to the plastic chair and sat on it and had 2 buttons in the arm he push one and it began to play nursery songs and he moved it from left to right where it turned the music up and down then he stopped it and push the other button where a small TV came out and had cartoons on it which junior found amazed and he could not stop from looking at the strange box. He got of the chair and crawled to it and seen a button which he slowly pressed but daddy came in and he quick put his hand back. “You must be hungry now” junior nodded and was picked up and daddy taken him to the kitchen where there was a high chair type thing. He placed junior inside and he pushed a button where the high chair started to move and 2 hands from nowhere got a cloth type bib which placed around junior and got some baby food and started to feed him. “eat it all up like a big boy” daddy said and junior did not like it but the high chair machine kept on feeding him till the last spoon-fed was finished after the machine wiped him down and daddy picked junior up and said “you now can go back to your room” junior crawled his way back and still amazed when he got back into his room that the strange box moved to a different part of his nursery and junior went over to it and moved his hand towards the button and the box opened to see loads of strange pagers and it turned and junior started to mumble and the machine spoken “I see baby has found me” junior looked sprised and looked around the room to see who was talking which no one was in sight and he looked at the box. “I can smell someone needs a new nappy” junior placed his head into the box and was grabbed by it and daddy walked in and said “you need to put your back towards it like you walking into it” so junior turned towards his back and slowly taken steps back into the box where it grabbed him and the pagers closed on him and the box stranded up saying “time to your wet nappy changed” the machine came out with some arms and pull downed juniors bottoms reliving his very soaked nappy and the box tiled back like a changing table and started to change him. The arms undid the tapes of his nappy and brought out some wipes to wipe him clean next the machine started to talk to him again “my baby smells nice again” junior just humbled to himself and the machine got a terry shape nappy with pins from the pile and the machine left juniors bum and could see he had a small rash which the box recognise “I see you got a small rash but don’t worry “ the machine got some nappy rash cream and spread it over juniors bottom and placed the terry under junior and began to nappy him. After the box said “you do you ever so cute and thank you for sitting still” junior smiled happy and the machine came back to normal stand and letted junior go and the machine stopped working. Daddy said “I wanted to show you that later but you beat me to it” junior was amazed on what it could do and daddy picked up junior and placed him in the cot where he fell to sleep.
Over the last couple of days junior was changed by the machine and was always using the high chair for feeding times. When it came towards for going home the box machine made sure he was dry for the train journey home and daddy taken him to the station and said you are more than welcome to come back anytime and junior said “don’t worry daddy I will”

[junyour]

Hard to read. Grammer (paragraphs and spacing would help. Please redo and see if it is worth continuing

[Mesmerale]

Originally Posted by junyour

Hard to read. Grammer (paragraphs and spacing would help. Please redo and see if it is worth continuing

I can't say anything about the "Hard to read." part, because I haven't read it yet.

But I agree with the paragraphs and spacing bit.

I'd be happy to edit this for you when I get home from work tonight, if you like.

[Angusmac]

Would I be correct in guessing that English is not your first language?

-Gus

[Colfpup]

would read, but GAGH wall of text. some paragraphs would be a help and from the way you described it it sounds like it might be a good story

[Lone_Wolf]

good story? but it really needs to be re done and have some paragraphs.

[Mitsukuni]

tl;dr

Seriously. Space out, grammar, paragraphs.

[Laram]

I Read A Little, Its Hard To Understand, You Use The Right Words But In The Wrong Places, And A Few Paragraphs And Grammar Wouldn't Kill, Some Words Are Missing Aswell.

[toddler82uk]

I am a toddler after all

[Mesmerale]

Originally Posted by toddler82uk

I am a toddler after all

Be careful about that, please..

It's fine if it's a joke, but you can't seriously use that as anexcuse, none of us can..